tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-332765764563879104.post4695154334892351385..comments2023-08-02T08:22:54.403-07:00Comments on NoReasonWhatsoever: Second BestCathrynLouishttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06380932922178601607noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-332765764563879104.post-52991738066066533732010-09-14T08:21:19.703-07:002010-09-14T08:21:19.703-07:00Excellent story!Excellent story!Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-332765764563879104.post-66546725988353105182010-09-10T17:40:28.006-07:002010-09-10T17:40:28.006-07:00Thanks, John. D. You're right - I should have ...Thanks, John. D. You're right - I should have pointed out that he took off his blue jacket. Thanks for the catch.<br /><br />Glad you liked it, Marc.CathrynLouishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06380932922178601607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-332765764563879104.post-37146171507364994302010-09-10T14:21:10.192-07:002010-09-10T14:21:10.192-07:00I loved the staccato rhythms of the first paragrap...I loved the staccato rhythms of the first paragraph, you could just feel his frustration & resentment.<br /><br />Personally I don't italacise inner thoughts for what it's worth<br /><br />Good job<br /><br />Marc NashSulci Collectivehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03293833259808943096noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-332765764563879104.post-40207980951566007392010-09-10T13:14:02.617-07:002010-09-10T13:14:02.617-07:00You did a great job of painting the scene. Really ...You did a great job of painting the scene. Really good. One small question: why is Curtis wearing dark clothes? Isn't he part of the paintball teams? I didn't get that, but otherwise it's terrific. The fingernail detail at the end is chilling, and perfect.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08236529774839136879noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-332765764563879104.post-51863693524804134312010-09-10T10:06:24.360-07:002010-09-10T10:06:24.360-07:00Thanks, Marisa!Thanks, Marisa!CathrynLouishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06380932922178601607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-332765764563879104.post-92070432142590157532010-09-10T10:05:43.204-07:002010-09-10T10:05:43.204-07:00That's a good question John. Some editors say ...That's a good question John. Some editors say italicize inner monologue; some say don't. I'm still not sure which is better. If I italicize inner monologue, how do I indicate emphasis in that monologue? Anybody know?CathrynLouishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06380932922178601607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-332765764563879104.post-70751911079719238752010-09-10T10:00:59.134-07:002010-09-10T10:00:59.134-07:00I like that final detail, that he'd check his ...I like that final detail, that he'd check his fingernails needlessly for a long time afterward. It feels very genuine.<br /><br />Are there some parts, like in the first paragraph of the second section, that should be italicized for inner monologue?John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-332765764563879104.post-9912401995361961842010-09-10T07:30:30.496-07:002010-09-10T07:30:30.496-07:00Oh, this was just excellent!Oh, this was just excellent!Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.com